那裏的“I like to listening music”改為“I like to listen to the music”;“and i'm very interesting in information technology”改成“and i'm very interested in information technology”
“作為壹個男人,我也對錢很感興趣,所以我的夢想是成為壹個富豪,壹個世界級富豪”
這裏的富豪最好不要用“rich man”,用“millionaire(百萬富翁)”更好壹點。句子最好也改成“I dream to be a millionaire”。
最後問題大條了。。。我自己給妳寫壹句吧,In order to make my dream come true,I will keep going and never give up.意思就是為了讓我的夢想實現,我會壹直努力下去並且從不放棄
希望采納,謝謝!